Friday Fictioneers is a weekly group hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields who chooses a photo prompt to inspire writers to produce a 100 word piece of flash fiction. Do use the link to her blog if you are interested in joining the group. It’s a great way to get involved in writing.
Lost and found
Finding the house had not been easy. A succession of diversions and dead ends. Time wasted. Hope set aside.
The building stood as it had in his mother’s paintings. He had watched with quiet delight as pictures emerged from her paintbrush. His early childhood had passed before he became aware that the subject of her work was always the same. It took him longer to recognise that the sun never lit up the scene.
Now a pale sun mocked as he stared, stricken by the changes made by circumstances and time. He could never tell her. Her heart would break.
Very good, very well written and felt like much more than 100 words
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Thank you for your appreciative response. It surprises me how much it is possible to include in the word count!
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A very mysterious and effective opening.
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Thank you for your response. Much appreciated.
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No, don’t tell! Her memories are important.
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And memories are fragile. We have to be careful when we refer to time that has passed. Your reply is so appropriate. Thank you.
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It sounds like her heart had long been broken?
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A sensitive and accurate response, Mike. Thank you
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So much not told, that make the story feel a lot better… wonderful
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Thank you for your response Bjorn. Your appreciation comes through very clearly. That’s feels good! Thanks again for that.
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Beautiful and mysterious. Truth and memories seldom go together well, the narrator is wise not to tell.
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Thank you for your thoughtful response. Very much appreciated.
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Dear Edith,
As an artist I find this intriguing.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for your response. I’m rather pleased that the story had a particular resonance for you.
Very best wishes from Edith
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