The start of a second year of writing! Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields who hosts Friday Fictioneers. Each week Rochelle chooses a photo prompt to inspire writers to produce a 100 word piece of flash fiction. Do use the link to her blog if you are interested in joining the group. It’s a great way to get involved in writing.
PHOTO PROMPT © Jennifer Pendergast
The time has come
The dark mist rolled across town. They tried the lights. Nothing happened. There was no power in the house. The phone was dead.
“What’s happening?” she said.
He tried the radio and television. Nothing. His laptop and tablet had some battery strength but that was all. His mobile phone was useless.
“Try yours,” he said, knowing there was no point.
They heard noises outside. Their neighbours were gathering in confusion.
“Does anyone know what’s going on?” Her voice shook as she spoke. No-one had an answer.
Standing supreme in the park, the huge wooden structure vibrated, then stood still. Waiting.
A great sense of mystery. Could be the beginning of something much longer
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Thank you, Neil. I’m hoping it will be!
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You left us with an ominous feel, nicely done.
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Thank you for your response and your description of how the story made you feel.
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The trojan horse has arrived it seems. No phones, that will be hard🙂🙂🙂🙂
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I love your reference to the Trojan horse. Thank you for that. And life without phones … Unthinkable!
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Oh, what a tension build. I WANT MORE! Great story! 🙂 ❤
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I’m working on it! Thanks so much for your enthusiastic response.
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Like the black monolith from the film “2001: A Space Odyssey”.
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A great connection you made there! Thanks for that. I wasn’t consciously thinking along those lines but I’m guessing my memory has held on to that image and offered up the idea.
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Something’s coming, and from the tone, it might not be friendly. Great piece of tense mystery Edith.
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Thank you, Iain. I’ve a feeling there are very difficult times ahead!
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Great build-up of tension and anticipation
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Thank you for your positive response – much appreciated.
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Sinisterly good.
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I love the way you expressed your response! Thank you so much.
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This left me wide-eyed, thinking of Trojan horses and alien invasions. The tension can be cut with a chainsaw!
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Wow! Such a great response. Thank you so much.
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Something’s approaching and it doesn’t bode well, great sense of suspense in this
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Thank you, Michael. I’m glad you felt the build up of tension.
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Oh, the description of the object vibrating was very chilling.
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There is something unnerving about it. Especially as it appears that the reader has some information that the characters in the story know nothing about …yet! Thank you for your comment.
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Oh!!! What happens next?
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Thank you for your response. Do keep reading and look out for the continuation of the story!
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I shall endeavor to do just that.
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Great sense of tension! I want to know what will happen next….!
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Thank you for your response. I’m glad the story caught your interest and you want to know more. There is more to come so please keep reading!
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Good tension-building. The last word leaves me unsure for two reasons. What’s going to happen next? And it’s like we’re suddenly into the wheel’s POV.
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Thank you for your comment. The reader is in the same position as the characters in the story – unsure of what is going on and not knowing what will happen next. The personification of the huge wooden structure may suggest that it is somehow connected to the events at the beginning of the story and, like the people in the story, is waiting but for very different reasons . . .
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